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RenegadePegasus wrote:

_h a z e l_ wrote:ping

Thank you! I did think I went a little overboard with the dialogue, I really wanted it to seem like {TM} Undaunted was a snotty braggart. I mean that’s kind of how I see him, since he is pretty successful. Thanks again for holding this contest!

Southerngal wrote:

_h a z e l_ wrote:...

I honestly didn't think I would get anything guess I was wrong? Thanks a lot though! I guess I could link this horse --> http://www.horseworldonline.net/horse/profile/2140196

Lila25172 wrote:

_h a z e l_ wrote:Results

1st Place:

Congratulations, you won the million dollar first place prize!
You got a total of 18 points- 4 for Story Flow, 5 for Research, 5 for Interest, and 4 for Grammar.
At first I wasn't sure if you would win because you didn't really focus on the actual race that much- but then I changed my mind . I loved your unique perspective and your story was excellent! It held my attention, flowed well, and you used grammar correctly. Wonderful job
Please link a rehomable horse for me to offer your money on!

2nd Place:

I absolutely loved your focus on the actual race Kam, great job
You earned 17 points- 4 for Story Flow, 5 for Research, 5 for Interest, and 3 for Grammar.
You had such a good story, I really enjoyed reading it Your perspective was neat, and I loved how you tried to give a background on each of the horses and me. You definitely did your research At the end of the day though, Southergal's grammar was better, so she takes first place.
Congrats , and please link a rehomable horse for me to offer your $500,000 on!

3rd Place:

Congratulations on third place Sawd!
You earned a total of 15 points- 3 for Story Flow, 4 for Research, 4 for Interest, and 4 for Grammar.
I absolutely loved your race description! I also liked how you told the story from the second place horse's point of view. The blow dryer incident was also pretty funny
Thank you so much for entering; I'm glad you enjoyed it! (I didn't mind one bit that your story was long )
Please link a rehomable horse for me to put your $250,000 on

Runner-Ups


I want to thank you both so much for entering I want to give you $150,000 for entering and for writing such good stories
Pegasus, you earned 14 points, you were only 1 point short of earning 3rd place You got 5 points for story flow, 3 for research, 4 for interest, and 2 for grammar. Your story flow was excellent and you held my interest, but your grammar hurt you in the end. I wasn't sure if I loved all of the dialogue between the two horses, but it was pretty amusing I want to thank you for entering, and I also want to say that you are a great writer I can't wait to see what you do with your section of the newsletter!
Lila, you earned 13 points- 3 for story flow, 2 for research, 4 for interest, and 4 for grammar. You had a great story! I liked your perspective, and I liked the humor you injected into a couple places in the story. However, your description of the actual race was only two or three sentences. I would have liked to see more about the race and more details period. I did genuinely enjoy your story though- I mean no offense Thank you so much for entering

Thank you so much for hosting this amazing contest! I really enjoyed writing a story for it! The link to the horse is down here: http://www.horseworldonline.net/horse/profile/2147824 I just put him up for offers! Thanks again!

Madi10117 wrote:

_h a z e l_ wrote:ping

Hazel,

Thank you! I knew I was going to be dinged on my grammar as I forgot to check it. Please split my prize with the two who did not place. I feel that I do not need it and would like to share the wealth.


Kamichi

_h a z e l_ wrote:

Madi10117 wrote:
Hazel,

Thank you! I knew I was going to be dinged on my grammar as I forgot to check it. Please split my prize with the two who did not place. I feel that I do not need it and would like to share the wealth.


Kamichi

Aw that's too bad Kam I really did love your story! Sure, I can do that for you That is very generous!

Kamichi Stables wrote:

_h a z e l_ wrote:
Aw that's too bad Kam I really did love your story! Sure, I can do that for you That is very generous!

Nah, it's all good. I had fun writing it and that is all that matters!


Kamichi

_h a z e l_ wrote:

RenegadePegasus wrote: Thank you! I did think I went a little overboard with the dialogue, I really wanted it to seem like {TM} Undaunted was a snotty braggart. I mean that’s kind of how I see him, since he is pretty successful. Thanks again for holding this contest!

You're welcome! It's all right, you did a great job You are most welcome! Btw, the second place winner wants me to give half her money to you and half to Lila, so you will receive $400,000 in total instead of $150,000

_h a z e l_ wrote:Results

1st Place:

Southerngal wrote:..

Congratulations, you won the million dollar first place prize!
You got a total of 18 points- 4 for Story Flow, 5 for Research, 5 for Interest, and 4 for Grammar.
At first I wasn't sure if you would win because you didn't really focus on the actual race that much- but then I changed my mind . I loved your unique perspective and your story was excellent! It held my attention, flowed well, and you used grammar correctly. Wonderful job
Please link a rehomable horse for me to offer your money on!

2nd Place:

Kamichi Stables wrote:...

I absolutely loved your focus on the actual race Kam, great job
You earned 17 points- 4 for Story Flow, 5 for Research, 5 for Interest, and 3 for Grammar.
You had such a good story, I really enjoyed reading it Your perspective was neat, and I loved how you tried to give a background on each of the horses and me. You definitely did your research At the end of the day though, Southergal's grammar was better, so she takes first place.
Congrats , and please link a rehomable horse for me to offer your $500,000 on!

3rd Place:

Sawd10 wrote:...

Congratulations on third place Sawd!
You earned a total of 15 points- 3 for Story Flow, 4 for Research, 4 for Interest, and 4 for Grammar.
I absolutely loved your race description! I also liked how you told the story from the second place horse's point of view. The blow dryer incident was also pretty funny
Thank you so much for entering; I'm glad you enjoyed it! (I didn't mind one bit that your story was long )
Please link a rehomable horse for me to put your $250,000 on

Runner-Ups

RenegadePegasus wrote:...

Lila25172 wrote:...

I want to thank you both so much for entering I want to give you $150,000 for entering and for writing such good stories
Pegasus, you earned 14 points, you were only 1 point short of earning 3rd place You got 5 points for story flow, 3 for research, 4 for interest, and 2 for grammar. Your story flow was excellent and you held my interest, but your grammar hurt you in the end. I wasn't sure if I loved all of the dialogue between the two horses, but it was pretty amusing I want to thank you for entering, and I also want to say that you are a great writer I can't wait to see what you do with your section of the newsletter!
Lila, you earned 13 points- 3 for story flow, 2 for research, 4 for interest, and 4 for grammar. You had a great story! I liked your perspective, and I liked the humor you injected into a couple places in the story. However, your description of the actual race was only two or three sentences. I would have liked to see more about the race and more details period. I did genuinely enjoy your story though- I mean no offense Thank you so much for entering

Sawd10 wrote:

_h a z e l_ wrote:Results

1st Place:

Congratulations, you won the million dollar first place prize!
You got a total of 18 points- 4 for Story Flow, 5 for Research, 5 for Interest, and 4 for Grammar.
At first I wasn't sure if you would win because you didn't really focus on the actual race that much- but then I changed my mind . I loved your unique perspective and your story was excellent! It held my attention, flowed well, and you used grammar correctly. Wonderful job
Please link a rehomable horse for me to offer your money on!

2nd Place:

I absolutely loved your focus on the actual race Kam, great job
You earned 17 points- 4 for Story Flow, 5 for Research, 5 for Interest, and 3 for Grammar.
You had such a good story, I really enjoyed reading it Your perspective was neat, and I loved how you tried to give a background on each of the horses and me. You definitely did your research At the end of the day though, Southergal's grammar was better, so she takes first place.
Congrats , and please link a rehomable horse for me to offer your $500,000 on!

3rd Place:

Congratulations on third place Sawd!
You earned a total of 15 points- 3 for Story Flow, 4 for Research, 4 for Interest, and 4 for Grammar.
I absolutely loved your race description! I also liked how you told the story from the second place horse's point of view. The blow dryer incident was also pretty funny
Thank you so much for entering; I'm glad you enjoyed it! (I didn't mind one bit that your story was long )
Please link a rehomable horse for me to put your $250,000 on

Runner-Ups


I want to thank you both so much for entering I want to give you $150,000 for entering and for writing such good stories
Pegasus, you earned 14 points, you were only 1 point short of earning 3rd place You got 5 points for story flow, 3 for research, 4 for interest, and 2 for grammar. Your story flow was excellent and you held my interest, but your grammar hurt you in the end. I wasn't sure if I loved all of the dialogue between the two horses, but it was pretty amusing I want to thank you for entering, and I also want to say that you are a great writer I can't wait to see what you do with your section of the newsletter!
Lila, you earned 13 points- 3 for story flow, 2 for research, 4 for interest, and 4 for grammar. You had a great story! I liked your perspective, and I liked the humor you injected into a couple places in the story. However, your description of the actual race was only two or three sentences. I would have liked to see more about the race and more details period. I did genuinely enjoy your story though- I mean no offense Thank you so much for entering

Oh, awesome! Thank you so much!
Here is a rehomable horse: http://www.horseworldonline.net/horse/profile/1977413 Thanks again, it was awesome!